Read this before work, but wanted to dedicate the right amt of time to properly review it.
I love the sprinkling of humor throughout.
kissing the bared bare skin. Loved the alliteration. mmmmm bared bare skin
on top of Wilson, drowning out a grunt from the naked squished doctor with a hungry kiss This was a great visual. I could see the naked squished doctor - *fluffs up Wilson* *Hides ummm well yeah nothing I can say to get out of that*
Lips upon lips, chest upon chest, good leg between legs… Great word economy to paint a picture, and yet remind us of House's injury - simple and pure text - very nice
It really was like their first time. Had it really been only six months? This is effective to remind us of the start and provide some exposition into their relationship.
“No, it’s fucking cold!”
House moved his hand from Wilson’s hair and smacked the oncologist across the ass. “Stop being a pussy.”
“Stop being so slooooww!” Wilson tried to inch backwards, to impale himself further, but a strong arm around his waist stopped his vain attempt. “What if I promise to give you a turn?” he tried to bargain.
This part and the next section has spot on banter. These to can really do playful sex, and you really captured that.
“Come on! A horny cripple is not the thing you want to have laying next to you for long!” I nice way to punctuate the humor of the piece and end with a very in character quip.
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Date: 2006-01-10 05:55 pm (UTC)I love the sprinkling of humor throughout.
kissing the bared bare skin.
Loved the alliteration. mmmmm bared bare skin
on top of Wilson, drowning out a grunt from the naked squished doctor with a hungry kiss
This was a great visual. I could see the naked squished doctor - *fluffs up Wilson* *Hides ummm well yeah nothing I can say to get out of that*
Lips upon lips, chest upon chest, good leg between legs…
Great word economy to paint a picture, and yet remind us of House's injury - simple and pure text - very nice
It really was like their first time. Had it really been only six months?
This is effective to remind us of the start and provide some exposition into their relationship.
“No, it’s fucking cold!”
House moved his hand from Wilson’s hair and smacked the oncologist across the ass. “Stop being a pussy.”
“Stop being so slooooww!” Wilson tried to inch backwards, to impale himself further, but a strong arm around his waist stopped his vain attempt. “What if I promise to give you a turn?” he tried to bargain.
This part and the next section has spot on banter. These to can really do playful sex, and you really captured that.
“Come on! A horny cripple is not the thing you want to have laying next to you for long!”
I nice way to punctuate the humor of the piece and end with a very in character quip.
Brava my dear, this was nice to wake up to.